Confessions of a Dirty Blonde: Capo breaks bad

Yesterday, my husband asked me to unfollow him on Twitter because he doesn’t want his followers to see how much I swear. His account is for business, after all.

So I thought, Well, fuck me.

And then I remembered the No. 1 Reason I work for myself: to avoid asshats who tell me I swear too much, obviously.

But do you know the No. 2 Reason I work for myself? I can hire anyone I want.

Welcome Lindsay Capobianco. The latest and greatest editor to pull up her skirt and break out the red pen. And our first new addition since last summer when Scott Southard came aboard. Bonus? She likes my swearing.

Capo, as I like to call her, just broke out of prison (read: former high school English teacher). She’ll be contributing to your delinquency twice a month.

Enter “Confessions of A Dirty Blonde.” It’ll hit your inbox every other Thursday, starting in June – assuming you’re subscribed to our awesomeness (upper right-hand corner of this page).

But, Becky, what the hell is ‘Confessions’?

A column. About writing shit Lindsay wishes she could have taught in the classroom. And other things – of no fucking value – she was forced to teach about writing and editing. The standard rules holding writers back and how habitually following them only makes it harder to break free. (Think misused words, the fucking thesaurus, semicolons, paragraph length, story structure, five-paragraph essays, lead ins and outs, hooks…from the perspective of someone who taught it.)

Look for it next month. And read below to learn all about her.

Lindsay says

In four weeks, I’m packing up and taking home a life I built for myself more than eight years.

Goodbye, classroom. Hello, dream job.

This move is five years in the making. Back then, I started blogging anonymously and met my friend (and cohort) the badass editor and writing coach you and I have in common. (That’s you, Beck.) She was thinkingtoohard. I was searching for my future.

And I was going awesome places.

I was a semi-finalist for a Bloggi.es.

And a Shorty Award nominee. Twice.

I edited for the now-extinct-but-totally-awesome website for writers (RIP Indieink.com).

I wrote for and was published in several books and websites under my pseudonym.

The year before Becky and I met, I left teaching to pursue a writing career. In a grey cubicle in the back of a lawyer’s office, I ghostwrote for any client I could, eating ramen noodles twice a day. I learned about SEO when it was young. I marketed myself on Facebook and Twitter.

And I feared my ability.

I didn’t trust my talent. So I ended up applying for another teaching job, hoping to regain my composure and a steady paycheck.

When the school year began and ghostwriting ended, I worked on becoming a better, more confident writer in my time outside of the classroom. Between teaching, coaching, grading and dating, I had little free time and too much stress. But I learned how to make a shitty first draft and go back to edit it (even if I could only work for fifteen minutes). I learned there’s more to life than comfort. And I learned I can’t break away from my desire to help, but I can do it outside of a high school classroom.

While I was forced to follow state standards and school policies, I learned about editing with honesty and compassion.

If you ever want to feel shitty, watch a seventeen year old football player cry because you told him his paper wasn’t up to standard.

If you ever want to make a difference, hand the dude a tissue and explain to him how he can grow as a writer.

Teaching shaped my career. My kids taught me more than I ever imagined. It’s now time for me to take those lessons and better my life with them. Which is why I started this journey with Becky more than a year ago.

Becky pushed me into her Write Raw Mastermind (only offered annually in the fall). I finished the first draft of my manuscript there, and I’m not looking back. So, when you struggle or sigh or fear your editor doesn’t understand what you’re going through, I don’t agree. I lived through it, too.

I’m a tough Italian girl, but I’m not a glutton for punishment. If I didn’t know I could do this, I wouldn’t put myself on the front line.

My first gift to you will help you save time and effort. If you Google my name, you’ll find three less-than-flattering pictures of me floating around the internet. You’ll find a handful of amateur articles I wrote in the beginning. And you’ll see my life as a teacher. I plan to continue saving you the much deserved time and effort in your writing career and our relationship.

Want to know more about me? Find me on Facebook. Or Twitter @IcedCapo. Or in Becky’s super-secret client group. We can play twenty questions. Or quarters. As long as you bring the cherry bourbon.

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5 Writing Lessons You Need to Unlearn (and 5 more you should adopt)

Oh sure. We all remember high school English. Verb-noun agreement. Proper use of the comma. How to write a thesis statement and a conclusion.

But some lessons are better off being forgotten. Here are five:

1 – Three sentences make a paragraph

Not always. In fact, hardly ever. If you’re writing a college essay, follow this rule. For your own writing, ignore that crap. It’s not uncommon to lead a news story with one sentence. In novels, it can be anything from one to five. The point is not to limit the number of sentences, but to complete the thought and keep the reader engaged.

Besides, everyone remembers rule-breakers.

It was the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was the age of wisdom, it was the age of foolishness, it was the epoch of belief, it was the epoch of incredulity, it was the season of Light, it was the season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it was the winter of despair.  – Charles Dickens, A Tale of Two Cities.

If you really want to hear about it, the first thing you’ll probably want to know is where I was born, and what my lousy childhood was like, and how my parents were occupied, and all that David Copperfield kind of crap, but I don’t feel like going into it, if you want to know the truth.  – J. D. Salinger, Catcher in the Rye.

It is a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.  – Jane Austen, Pride and Prejudice

2 – Two spaces between sentences

Just follow the link. It says it all, especially this: “Is this arbitrary? Sure it is. But so are a lot of our conventions for writing.”

3 – Every sentence needs a noun and verb

Sometimes, a sentence fragment is downright sexy. No really. It shakes shit up for the reader. Of course, it’s like anything else in that you don’t want to do it too much. Because then the effect is lost. Like when a writer italicizes something in every other sentence for emphasis. Or uses a million exclamation points. Get it?

4 – You need a beginning, a middle and an end

For a term paper. Not so much for other kinds of writing. We don’t always have time for preamble. Sometimes, we need to dive in.

You see this mainly in news reporting. But it’s also fucking polite (see what I did there?) to get to the point in an email, blog post or memo. People are busy. We don’t always have time to peruse pages and pages of bullshit. The best writers are great with word economy while giving us important details, so we want to keep reading.

Edna Buchanan began a story for The Miami Herald this way:

Bad things happen to the husbands of the Widow Elkin.

Someone murdered husband No. 4, Cecil Elkin, apparently smashing his head with a frying pan as he watched “Family Feud” on TV.

Husband No. 3, Samuel Smilich, drowned in a weedy South Dade canal.

Husband No. 2, Lawrence Myers, can­not be found. . .

Tell me you’re not dying to know the deal. She ends it this way:

It is the murder of her fourth husband that got Margaret Elkin in trouble. She is accused of trying to hire a beekeeper to kill him. The trial is set for Sept. 9.

A typical story would have started with the date for the trial – because that’s the news. But when Buchanan dug around for info, she found an amazing series of events. And she was smart enough to write it that way. (In journalist jargon, this is called a kicker.)

5 – Throw out your thesaurus

Or burn it. Your choice.

The thesaurus causes more problems than it solves. And as long as it’s around, you’ll be tempted to use it rather than rely on your own brilliance.

And trust me: your words are far better than anything you seek in the thesaurus.

I spend the majority of my editing time reminding writers to just say what they mean. Don’t be clever. Be clear. Don’t make the reader work because you have to work to write it. Because the reader won’t work to read. She will stop reading and that sucks for you, the writer.

Every time you pick up the thesaurus, you’re seeking a word to replace whatever came to mind. Ask yourself, “Would I grab a thesaurus to replace a word before I said it in conversation with a friend?” Of course not. So don’t write that way. Just say it.

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Now that we’ve covered the shit you don’t need, let’s look at five quick things you can do to make your writing better.

1. Cut with a chainsaw

Sometimes writers get excited about description. That’s when it usually becomes wordiness. I call it overwriting and it’s common with both new and seasoned writers.

We want to create a new image. But the simplest way of saying something is also the best. When you thump your chest with your prose, you stop storytelling. Overwriting is trying too hard. Writing with clarity lets the story speak.

Does your reader need to know the killer prefers boxers to briefs? Unless it’s important to the plot, no.

Not sure if something should go? Take it out.

2. Hire an editor

I don’t care who you are, if you’re a writer, you need an editor. If you are an editor, you definitely need an editor.

3. Have a plot

Choose a complication and resolve it. This is a plot. Your character wants or needs something and can’t get it for some reason. This is the complication.

How do they get it? This is the story. Once your character figures out how to get what she wants, you have a plot.

4. Write a lot, then write some more

The more you do a thing, the better you become. Nowhere is this more true than writing. Give yourself permission to write the utter crap you must write in order to improve.

5. Use “said”

Writers often try to come up with words to replace “said” as a dialogue tag. Shrieked. Groaned. Huffed. Growled. Choked.

Amateur mistake. You’re better than that.

“Said” doesn’t distract the reader from what’s important – your dialogue. Because like it or not, what is being said is more important than how it is being said. Don’t disrupt the flow of your story by thumping your chest with a fancy word. Don’t take your reader out of the story to pause and reflect on how clever you are. Readers hate that. They want to escape. It’s why they read.

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